吳詩綺老師的教學部落格

下面是 You are the Teacher 評分兩分的文章。

以下的文章，可能會出現在你我身上
希望我們能夠從好的學到如何更好，
也從低分的文章，學到如何讓我們避免下列錯誤。

也希望這篇文章的作者，在經過我們討論之後，
下次會越來越進步。

這位同學所花的時間:

Time Taken:

24 minutes 18 seconds

24分鐘，事實上，在大考的時候，大家根本沒有這麼充分的時間可以運用來 [全部寫作文]
因此現在的鍛鍊，都是讓大家在一定的時間內 (尚未限制時間)
盡量寫250-300 左右的文長
以此，日後短時間寫短文，也可以得心應手

Score 2:  Insufficient

•  Provides little information and makes little attempt at development.
•  Is very disorganized or too brief to detect organization.
•  Exhibits little control over sentence structure.
•  Contains inaccurate word choices in much of the essay.
•  Is characterized by misspellings, missing words, and incorrect word order; errors in grammar, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation are severe enough to make understanding very difficult in much of the essay.

Trait Feedback Analysis
Grammar:		3 errors		3 Fragment or Missing Comma
Usage:		0 errors
Mechanics:		3 errors		3 Spelling
Style:		18 comments		18 Repetition of Words

Essay:

One day morning, I woke up with tired. Suddeniy, I found that I had become a teacher! I could't believe it. After an hour. I slowly accepted the true and went to school for work. The place where I worked is a college. When I got in the college everying was different to me. I didn't to me. When I entered the room a student asked me what's today's experiments. I finally realized that I had become a chemical professor. But I only knew a little about chemical things. As the time went on,I felt very bad about what I had been.All the thing I learned was don't be the teacher forever.